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armourereric
Joined: 25 Aug 2008
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| Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 9:25 pm Post subject: Please give me your feedback: jamesriverarmoury.com |
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Hi,
I am just starting my annual assesement of my buisness operations, and thought I would come here for feedback, below find the current decriprion for my moist popular selling item, my full steel arms, in which i sell about 200 sets a year all made by hand by me. I will say up front, I know it is reall subpar. I am looking for feedback on how to use wording to optimize my SEO anlong with any missing verbage that I could use. I will essentially change the item and specs in the description as a master templaate for eBid, EBay and Bonanzle.
Thank you,
Eric Joseph
James River Armoury
San Diego
www.jamesriverarmoury.com
Look great for less!
Handmade in the USA
Hello, these are a matched set of handmade full steel arms made by me and my shop, James River Armoury. They are made of all 16 guage mild steel polished to a 120 grit formax satin-glo finish and are fully strapped and ready to wear. The vambrace can be fitted to your measurements or you can select from 2 stock choices: 10" wrist and 14" bicept or 8.5" wrist 12.5" bicept. If you choose the custom option, please allow 3 weeks for delivery. My work has appeared in The Tudors and Kindgdom of Heaven and extensively in SCI-FI Channel's Tin Man, buy with confidence, I have been making armour since 1983 and have been selling on ebay since 2001. |
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purple_reading_giraffe
Joined: 04 Feb 2008
Posts: 5485
Location: Indiana, USA
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| Posted: Mon Nov 09, 2009 6:09 pm Post subject: |
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Heya eric - a few thoughts right off - correct gauge for guage (though you might include both), and bicep for bicept.
You mention 'vambrace' - you might work in some other armor-specific words (for the true armour-geeks).
Do you want to sell to US as well as Britain? You might add armor as well as armour.
You don't mention the padding - included/not (unless that's the vambrace... I regret all my F&SF reading is not handing me words at the moment.
Some other associations that might help if 'mixed in':
Knight in Shining Armour
Renaissance Faire
Jousting
Halloween
Costume Ball
Reenactment
Medieval
Dragon fighting
Swords
Shields
Princess
Suit of Armor
Suit of Armour
Full Armor Suit
Google has a keyword tool that could be very helpful. |
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purple_reading_giraffe
Joined: 04 Feb 2008
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Location: Indiana, USA
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| Posted: Mon Nov 09, 2009 6:11 pm Post subject: |
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| Oh - and Blacksmith and do you have Chain Mail? |
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armourereric
Joined: 25 Aug 2008
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| Posted: Mon Nov 09, 2009 6:24 pm Post subject: Re: Please give me your feedback: jamesriverarmoury.com |
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PRG, thank you for the reply, I do sell all over the world, my last 3 sales have been in the UK, New Zealand and Canada. I'll be starting this project Friday night.
Eric |
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Money_Auctionz
Joined: 17 May 2008
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| Posted: Mon Nov 09, 2009 9:20 pm Post subject: Re: Please give me your feedback: jamesriverarmoury.com |
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I did notice that in the very first sentance of the helmet description the word "helmet" is mis-spelled as "helm"..Not quite the best way to begin.
Just what I saw first...
Best success with your site...
Kat |
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DaLizardsLair
Joined: 15 Feb 2009
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| Posted: Mon Nov 09, 2009 10:26 pm Post subject: |
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purple_reading_giraffe wrote (View Post): › docWrite("quote")Oh - and Blacksmith and do you have Chain Mail?
Scale Mail is better.
Take it from one who knows. :lol: |
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purple_reading_giraffe
Joined: 04 Feb 2008
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Location: Indiana, USA
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| Posted: Mon Nov 09, 2009 10:52 pm Post subject: |
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Eric:
Full Medieval Steel Armor Set Custom Made
Need to rescue a princess? Fight a dragon? Shine at your next Renaissance Fayre? Get a real set of armour from a real armourer, custom made to your measurements - or choose from two stock options.
Your full armor suit includes vambrace, (fill in names of other pieces) , complete with buckles, (fill in etc.) , and ready to wear. We use mild steel (etc.) made in the style of (time period) .
Be sure to check out our matching shields, (related items) . Your helm can be customized (feathers? crests? face-type? lady-favor attachment?) .
No true Knight should be without the finest suit of armour possible, and we take pride in our excellence. Some of our work can be seen...
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